How to Write Great Essays

HOW TO WRITE GREAT ESSAYS


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HOW TO WRITE GREAT ESSAYS

CHAPTER 8 Sample Essay Prompts and Essays
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I grew up in a large family—I am the oldest of six—and I have many won-
derful memories from my childhood. I am very close to most of my siblings
and I treasure my relationships with them. But when I have my own family
someday, it won’t be as big as the one I grew up in. As much as my large
family was full of love, and as much as I learned about sharing, giving, and
patience, I think having too many kids puts too much pressure on the parents,
both in terms of time and money, and on the oldest children.
When I think back on my childhood, I remember playing with my siblings or
grandparents. I don’t remember spending a whole lot of time with my mother
and father. They were always around, but they were always busy. My mother
was always cooking, cleaning, nursing, changing a diaper, shopping, or taking
someone to baseball practice, and my father was always working. He needed
overtime whenever he could get it, and weekends were always full of projects
around the house.
Money was also a constant worry for my family. With so many children,
our budget was always tight. Back-to-school shopping was always a stressful
time; we all wanted the latest fashions, but we could only get a few things. My
younger siblings lived in hand-me-downs. We shopped at bargain stores and
often got clothes that we didn’t really like because they were on sale. Our
house always needed repairs, and there was never enough money to keep up.
Another problem with large families is that the older siblings always end up
being babysitters. Like it or not (and most of the time I didn’t like it), I had to
watch my younger brothers and sisters. At age six, I could change a diaper
like a pro. I was getting my brothers and sisters dressed, giving them break-
fast, helping them get ready for bed.
I don’t want to give the impression that I didn’t have a happy childhood. I
most definitely did; I was loved as much as my parents could love me, and I
had wonderful fun with my brothers and sisters. But I always wanted a little
more time with Mom and Dad, and I often resented having so much responsi-
bility. I wished my mom wasn’t always so tired and my dad didn’t have to work
so much. Because I want to be there more for my kids, because I want them
to be kids throughout their childhood, I plan to have a much smaller family.
EVALUATION
This essay is another example of how the five-paragraph essay works well for timed writ-
ing. There is a clear and logical explanation of ideas, and each main point is explored in its
own paragraph. The requirements of the writing prompt are met in a creative and original
manner, while the thesis remains obvious. Evidence and examples are used well to support
the ideas, and transitional words and sentences guide the reader through the piece. The essay
demonstrates a sense of audience by using effective vocabulary, varied sentence structure,
and fluid, sophisticated language that is essentially without errors.