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4) Body paragraph 2

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The village now looks more urbanized. In the past, a small population
used to live on both sides of the river, which was accessible by a bridge.
However, the bridge is now removed, and houses are replaced by
apartment buildings to the river’s right side. In the northwest, the farm
is converted into factories. Moreover, the school to the south of the
farm is now transformed into a large college. The local market next to
the school is also turned into a shopping mall. The clinic to the north of
the forest is altered to a hospital. Besides, the car park between the
clinic and the market is expanded.
(A general statement focusing on detailed changes regarding urbanization
has initiated the paragraph. A wide range of structures , relative clauses are
used. Appropriate language to describe changes, passive voice, and correct
tenses are highlighted.)
Sample writing
The two maps illustrate how a village has changed from 1970 up until now.
Overall, there have been significant changes transforming the area into a
modernized region . The village is now more industrial than in the past.
In 1970, the village used to be more natural-looking with a vast forest in
southern parts , which is now partly cut down to be replaced by a park in
the south-west . The river that runs from the mountain used to flow into a
large lake , which is now shrunk into a pond . Moreover, the woods would
provide a natural habitat for wildlife, which is now being pushed away due
to deforestation. Another noticeable change is the campsite around the lake,
which is now limited to a day-use picnic area.
The village now looks more urbanized . In the past, a small population used
to live on both sides of the river , which was accessible by a bridge.
However, the bridge is now removed , and houses are replaced by
apartment buildings to the river’s right side . In the northwest, the farm is
converted into factories. Moreover, the school to the south of the farm is
now transformed into a large college. The local market next to the school is
also turned into a shopping mall. The clinic to the north of the forest is
altered to a hospital. Besides, the car park between the clinic and the market
is expanded .
(235 words)

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