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soccer team with the death of her grandmother. The result is a
unique piece that tells the
reader more about the writer, and displays her ability to convey her
feelings and experiences
effectively through the written word.
Why does this essay work? It follows much of the advice given in Chapter 6. For instance,
look back to the list of qualities colleges are looking for (page 71). Of the
nine qualities,
only two are not included (intellectual ability and academic achievement). Next, review the
tips on pages 77–78 for avoiding the most common essay blunders. Note how this essay, while
it ends with a dying grandmother
and failure to make the team, avoids negativity. The writer
is
honest about her emotions, and comes across as a strong person who, while
hurt by the
experiences she describes, has the strength and inner resources to keep moving forward.
The
piece is original, deeply personal, confident without being pompous, and
set in the recent
past. It is a fine example of a great essay.
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