Ielts writing Task 1 + 2

293 words.
IELTS EXAMINER COMMENTS
+ Task response:
Certainly, this essay meets most of the criteria for a very high band score. I
would characterize your response as “well-developed, with relevant, extended
and supported ideas”. Correctly, you did not try to discuss too many reasons
for the problem [you focused on two important reasons in paragraph 2].
+ Coherence and cohesion:
As always, you provided a well-organized essay. The logical paragraph
structure is supported by precise topic sentences and clearly identified
arguments. Sentences were well-linked.
+ Lexical resource:
There is some excellent vocabulary too: Increasing levels of poverty and
rising wealth inequalities impact on the economic growth of a country and
the security of its citizens/ the poor may turn to crimes such as drug
trafficking, prostitution, robbery and violent attacks on others….
+ Grammatical range and accuracy:
As with lexis, this area of your writing is strong. There is no problem with the
range of grammar structures, which included a second conditional sentence,
relative clauses and the consistently correct use of modal auxiliary verbs
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TASK 2 WRITING LANGUAGE
CAUTIOUS LANGUAGE
When do we use 
“therefore”
? 
When we use 
cause and effect
.
For example: it’s very cold. Therefore, I put my jacket on.
The ticket was very expensive. Therefore/so, I had saved money for many
months.
You are showing a relationship.
Something causes something else. Therefore, I think 
(a personal opinion)
Something
that is 
a cause
. 
Therefore
, there is 
a fact.
Clear signals: 
It cannot be denied
that/moreover/also/meanwhile/nevertheless/I am of the opinion that.
If you want to make a statement/claim that you are 
harder to prove it wrong
,
you 
need to make a weaker statement
.
For example: email 
may
 cause extra work and stress. I’m not saying it does,
because if it does, it’s a fact….so be cautious.