+ Task response:
This is an excellent essay with a lot of strong points. It is a very interesting
one. In paragraph 2, you suggested two very relevant reasons for this trend.
You explained both of them fully and you supported your second point with
an example. In paragraph 3, you focused exclusively on positive impacts.
You argued both point convincingly and at length,
again giving real-life
examples to support your ideas. My score for task response is 9
+ Coherence and cohesion:
The topic sentences were ideal. You identified your arguments perfectly in
paragraph 2 and paragraph 3. As your sentences were also linked very
smoothly, and for coherence/cohesion, my score is 9.
+ Lexical resource:
I think that one of the strong points is this essay is your awareness of words
which combine together well (“collocations”): far-flung
destinations, have a
wide choice of places to go, to be immensely popular with, etc.
+ Grammatical range and accuracy:
You use a range of structures both simple and complex.
As with lexis, this
area of your writing is strong.
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PROBLEM & SOLUTION ESSAY
Let’s talk about problem & solution essay
The language that we use for part 3 speaking is really the same as the
language we use for the essay
(cause
and effect, comparison, conditionals…)
INTRODUCTION:
Your first sentence is going to be
a context
. There
are two ways you can do
this:
You can present the problem and the context
(nowadays, traffic in cities is
becoming a serious problem.../ nowadays/in recent times, the number of
vehicles in cities has increased tremendously
(context)
. As a result, the
pollution from these vehicles is causing a serious problem. This problem is
leading to respiratory illness for urban residents and visitors.)
If you tell the
reader your introduction
,
you will bring up a problem
(the
reader will expect that you will be explaining the problem, and then they
need you to give some solutions to solve the problem.)
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