struggle over those two unfamiliar syllables fills me with glee. I feel
as though I am adding a new
word to their vocabulary. So on my last day as a page in the U.S. Senate, I prepared myself for the
anticipated awkward stumbling as Senator Harry Reid thanked me by name in his closing address. But
the stumble never came. I felt very humbled by his perfect pronunciation. Perhaps
Chaffee
is actually
catching on!
REVIEW
Chaffee’s essay is strong because it follows a clear narrative, all enabled by her rather unusual name.
While not everyone has a name as unique as “Chaffee,” and are therefore unable to use this approach,
writing an essay about an experience or aspect of one’s life that is singular to oneself is a smart
approach for any college essay. She shapes her development from preschool
to high school in the
lens of her name, demonstrating the importance that it has played throughout her life.
Chaffee’s initial anecdote immediately grips the reader; many people have shared the experience
of looking for engraved merchandise, and the fact that she can find none bearing her name sets the
stage for the rest of the essay. Chaffee quickly qualifies her discontent with her name, stating that this
anecdote “is one of the few negative aspects of a name like ‘Chaffee Duckers.’” Unfortunately this
qualification is a bit misplaced since she immediately returns to tell a story of her upbringing while
failing to address any of the positive aspects of her name until paragraphs later. This is a bit of
hedging that isn’t entirely necessary in the limited space allowed by most personal statements.
Yet, the essay works quite well. Chaffee spends a great deal of time elaborating on how she was
different from both her family and others with examples of her transgressions in preschool and her
penchant for schoolwork and education as opposed to procrastination
or video games like
Grand
Theft Auto
. Chaffee toots her own horn just a little bit when describing the merits of her work ethic,
but it is still fairly endearing overall, and there is no shame in sharing a desire for learning. Chaffee
states in the conclusion of her essay that she now takes “pride in the confusion on a person’s face,” as
they try to read her name, demonstrating how she has now accepted and come to appreciate the fact
that she does not share a name with the average Mary, Dick, or Jane.
—David W. Kaufman