examples of young people using gap years to achieve something significant, whether in voluntary
work or in a sector of business that interests them.
In conclusion, my own feeling is that a year off can indeed be a useful activity, with the
experience leading to improved skills that are invaluable in the future. Of course, this is provided that
the year is planned carefully and used for something genuinely worthwhile.
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Examiner’s comments
This is a good example of a Band 9 essay. The writer discusses each side of the debate,
giving two or three points to support each side. The points are relevant and clear, without being too
specific or personal. The linking words used (
e.g. On the other hand, furthermore, in conclusion)
show the reader how the essay develops and what to expect at each stage. The language is academic
but understandable to a general reader. The opinion in the conclusion is expressed without emotion or
attempts at humour.
Example Task 4
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