to develop, as it builds skills of planning and reaching targets. We can see this in the way that
disciplined people build up quite large sums through small monthly contributions to savings plans. In
many cases this meets important objectives in their lives, including large purchases such as cars or
property. Finally, we have to remember the reasons for the current economic problems besetting the
world. The crisis was caused by excessive spending and insufficient saving – not just by individuals,
but by corporations and even governments themselves. I feel that an emphasis on sensible saving
should be a universal strategy now.
I do appreciate that some people think differently, saying that it is better to live for the moment
and spend accordingly. While some daily spending is essential, of course, I feel this is a potentially
unwise viewpoint, especially considering recent global events.
To conclude, I believe that saving is the wiser course, not just for financial but also for
personal and political reasons. Sensible saving is an invaluable skill and a buffer against uncertainty.
(279 words)
Examiner’s comments
This would be a Band 9 essay. It exceeds the minimum word count and is organized in clear
paragraphs. The writer introduces the topic briefly, and then states his/her viewpoint in the
introduction. There are then three clear and logical reasons to justify the viewpoint, with some simple
examples that can be understood by anyone with a general awareness of the world. The opposing
view is mentioned briefly, and then rejected, so the essay is not completely one-sided. The conclusion
re-states the writer’s opinion and summarizes without repeating details. The English is
formal/academic, but not complicated. The choice of words is academic (e.g.
turmoil, insufficient,
invaluable) but still clear. There are clear linking phrases to guide the reader through the stages of the
essay (e.g.
firstly, finally, to conclude.)
Example Task 6
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