risk of hardship or even bankruptcy. This is especially true in the current economic situation. Lastly
on this side of the debate, people emphasise the need to accumulate wealth during one’s lifetime, so
that one’s children can inherit money or property which will increase their security and standard of
living.
Overall, I tend to agree that it is wiser to save money wherever possible, for reasons which
benefit both individuals today and future generations.
(263 words.)
Examiner’s comments
This is a Band 9 essay. As the examiner, it is immediately clear to me in the first paragraph
that the writer is introducing an OPINION > DISCUSSION essay, which the task requires. The two
sides of the topic are then discussed in logical paragraphs, with a series of simple examples to
support each side. The linking phrases help to introduce each example (E.g
. On the one hand, in
addition, finally,) and they also show me the stages of the essay (E.g
Overall to introduce the
conclusion.) The English used is reasonably academic (E.g.
Large proportion, emphasize the need)
and the sentences are generally clear. The reader gets the impression that the writer is rational and
well-informed, and able to discuss a topic objectively.
Example Task 5
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