Paragraph B Yesterday at 10:00
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M
., Mark Spencer, the pop-
ular Director of the Smithfield Museum of Art, held
a press conference. The room was buzzing with
reporters as Mr. Spencer took the podium. Standing
to his right was a striking woman with a crimson
suit. Mr. Spencer first discussed the soon-to-be-
launched artist-in-residence program as well as the
upcoming annual fundraising dinner, which has
been the hottest ticket in town ever since Mr.
Spencer came to the Smithfield.
The room was thick with curiosity as Mr.
Spencer turned toward the mysterious woman and
invited her to join him at the podium. Mr. Spencer
then spoke in an excited and genuine tone, “I’m
delighted to introduce to you, the new Director of
Development of the Smithfield Museum, Ms.
Eleanor Cartwright.” Mr. Spencer explained that
this position was created due to the building of the
new wing, for which construction is scheduled to
start soon. The wing will house the impressive and
significant art collection of Mr. and Mrs. Martin
Buckner, which was donated to the museum last
year. Mr. Spencer listed Ms. Cartwright’s impressive
credentials as the reporters hung on every word.
Finally, Ms. Cartwright took the podium and wowed
everyone with details about the new wing. She also
took several questions. By the time she was done,
everyone in attendance was charmed by her wit and
sophistication and they left the room convinced that
the Smithfield Museum, once barely known, was
truly becoming a major force in the art world.
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