EVALUATION This essay is written to the prompt, and also takes it a step further. The writer not only describes
what led her to want to be a teacher, but ends by explaining why she believes it is the right
choice, and what she needs to do to prepare herself for it. The last paragraph helps the reader
understand the clarity with which she made her decision.
The essay shows a good grasp of the rules of written English. There are few, if any, mis-
takes in mechanics, grammar, or spelling. Her word choices (“social dynamics,” “creative
problem-solving,”“learning encounters”) are sophisticated without being stiff or pompous.
One suggested improvement would be greater variety in sentence structure—most of her
sentences are long and complex.
