Examiner comment
Band 7.5
The test taker presents a clear position at the outset and explores some ideas to support this. An
alternative position is also considered, but rejected. This is a strong response, but there is rather
too much emphasis on technology: other aspects of the proposition could also be considered,
e.g. less physical work and more sedentary work, greater reliance on cars meaning less
exercise, aging populations in some countries leading to more complex health issues. Ideas are
organised logically and there is a clear progression throughout the response, with good use of
cohesive devices and logical paragraphing. The response could perhaps be improved by
breaking down paragraphs 2 and 3. There is a wide range of vocabulary with good use of less
common items as well as evidence of higher level features, such as ‘softening’, e.g. ‘They tend
to’, ‘
This appears to be’, and
‘might disagree’. Errors in spelling and word formation are rare.
There is also a variety of complex structures with frequent error-free sentences, though some
errors do occur and there is some overuse of rather short sentence forms.
